paper critique-Nick Lubic

I took a look at Jim's paper, which was a short story on a soon to be college student. He did a good job of really describing how the main character was feeling and what was going through his head. His story was a little short so I suggested that he go into more of how his mother was feeling about him going away to college. His research was a little bit hard to find but once he explain what he was incorporating, it made more sense. Also, I couldn't really find a way that the story connected to the class. He , again, explained that it was related to McKibben so it made more sense. Overall, he did a good job.