Critique

I critiqued Andre's paper in class. I really liked his ideas on communication and his relation to Ware and Butler. I felt that Andre's paper had a lot of good facts and it was apparent that he had done his research. I suggested to Andre, as you did, that he make the paper a bit more personal and give his point of view. I also suggested, at specific points that Andre explore deeper the ideas of isolation, in relation to jimmy, and the part communication has played in his own life. The last thing that I suggested was a better transition to the paragraph that talked about Butler and Lilith. Overall, I thought Andres paper well written, well researched, and well thought out.