Tuesday, September 2, 2008

Jessica Rhodunda
Dr Adams
9/2/08
English Comp

As the World Changes
As the world changes, so does the land. At the same time, the land is being handed over by different people. This handing over of land affects the world and people in many ways. In Nathaniel Hawthorne “The House of the Seven Gables”, he greatly shows the reader the massive changes that happen in the world. He shows us how possession of one’s things can be destroyed just by the different owner.

In the first chapter there is a man named Matthew Maule who owns this beautiful land just outside of a town. He has a well that flows with crisp clean water and the trees are in abundance. Unfortunately, there is another man that wants Maule’s land and his name is Colonel Pyncheon. The Colonel wants Maule’s land so much he accuses Maule of witchcraft. So Maule is trialed for witchcraft, found guilty, and sentenced to be hung. As Maule is about to be hung he curses at Pycheon, but Pycheon doesn’t really mind. Only a few days later, Colonel Pycheon starts to build his house on the land that Maule use to own.

“It was a curious and, as some people thought, an ominous fact that, very soon after the workmen began their operations, the spring of water,…, entirely lost the deliciousness of its pristine quality.”(p4)

This quote explains how the turnover of the land, actually changed the land. It went from Maule, who was a decent man, to Colonel Pycheon, who unrightfully accused Maule. The well on the land was crisp and clean when Maule was living on the land. But when Pycheon came and started to build on it, the well went black and the quality of the water was destroyed. This demonstrates the effect of man has on the land.

The effect of the land based on people isn’t just in the books. It is happening in the present right now because of all of it for the industrialization of the world. The deforestation of the wilderness is greatly affected by the people. They are cutting down trees when it really isn’t necessary and making the land useless. Also, the population that people are causing with cars and factories are destroying the land too. The lakes and rivers that are connected or near the factories are getting the residue from them and harming the living animals in it. In addition, the air which people and animals breathe is getting populated from the cars that we drive. The cars that have to be the newest fad , the fastest cars, the ones that are sending population in the air. This is a chain reaction to the land.

The current events and the event in Hawthorne’s book are greatly alike. The main cause of this is the change in the way people are thinking. Colonel Pycheon wanted the land, so he did everything in his power to get it. People today want everything to be high tech and up to date. They don’t think about the changes that it is making on the land around them. The change of land from people to people greatly effects the environment. This greatly shows how the works of man are sometimes evil.

3 comments:

Andre Cedeno said...

You do not need to summarize the beginning of the story just bring up the examples from the text that you are going to use.

You should explain why the passage about the change in land demonstrates or relates to the major theme of change that Hawthorne is talking about in the book. Talk about how it connects to all the other changes going on in the book such as the hard times the Pyncheon family came upon. You could do the same thing for the change in the land in the world we live in today. Such as talking about how pollution has affected people not just the environment. Connect your idea of change to Hawthorne’s idea of change.

You should connect the examples of land being changed by mankind in the story to how land is being changed today more. Compare the well going bad to pollution today. Don’t do each thing separately connect them.

Talk more about why you feel the change in the land in the story is bad, you did a good job of discussing the effects of pollution in our time. Use the same amount of detail to discuss the disastrous effects of the changes to the land in the book.

Also avoid grammar mistakes and pollution instead of population.

Jessica Rhodunda said...

Jessica Rhodunda
Dr Adams
9/2/08
English Comp

As the World Changes
In Nathaniel Hawthorne, “The House of the Seven Gables”, he greatly shows the reader the massive changes that happen in the world. He shows us how possession of one’s things can be destroyed just by the different owner.

In the first chapter there is a man named Matthew Maule who owns this beautiful land just outside of a town. He has a well that flows with crisp clean water and the trees are in abundance. Unfortunately, there is another man that wants Maule’s land and his name is Colonel Pyncheon. The Colonel wants Maule’s land so much he accuses Maule of witchcraft. So Maule is trialed for witchcraft, found guilty, and sentenced to be hung. As Maule is about to be hung he curses at Pycheon, but Pycheon doesn’t really mind. Only a few days later, Colonel Pycheon starts to build his house on the land that Maule use to own.

“It was a curious and, as some people thought, an ominous fact that, very soon after the workmen began their operations, the spring of water,…, entirely lost the deliciousness of its pristine quality.”(p4)

This quote explains how the turnover of the land, actually changed the land. It went from Maule, who was a decent man, to Colonel Pycheon, who unrightfully accused Maule. The well on the land was crisp and clean when Maule was living on the land. But when Pycheon came and started to build on it, the well went black and the quality of the water was destroyed. This made the land that the house was built on go down in value. The effect of the pollution on the well, also effected the people in the house. It put a cloud over the house and made it dreary. The area where the house was built was beautiful before the Pycheon house was created, but when it was started, the land took on a gloomy effect.

The effect of the land based on people isn’t just in the books. It is happening in the present right now because of all of it for the industrialization of the world. The deforestation of the wilderness is greatly affected by the people. They are cutting down trees when it really isn’t necessary and making the land useless. Also, the pollution that people are causing with cars and factories are destroying the land too. The lakes and rivers that are connected or near the factories are getting the residue from them and harming the living animals in it. In addition, the air which people and animals breathe is getting populated from the cars that we drive. The cars that have to be the newest fad , the fastest cars, the ones that are sending population in the air. Not only is it effecting the land but it is effecting the people as well. More people are getting sick because of the pollution that is in the air. This is a chain reaction to the land.

The current events and the event in Hawthorne’s book are greatly alike. The main cause of this is the change in the way people are thinking. Colonel Pycheon wanted the land, so he did everything in his power to get it. People today want everything to be high tech and up to date. They don’t think about the changes that it is making on the land around them. The change of land from people to people greatly effects the environment. This greatly shows how the works of man are sometimes evil.

Adam Johns said...

I have no idea what your introduction is trying to say. I do know that it is highly repetitive, even if I can’t understand the main point. As Andre pointed out, your second paragraph isn’t at all necessary - you want to avoid summarization, not indulge in it.

I liked your quote - it’s focused and interesting. Why didn’t you just start with it, especially since you were obviously having difficulty finding your focus?

Andre’s main comment - that you needed to explain how your quote fits in with the book as a whole, exemplifying a concept, is excellent. You did attempt to revise your paper, but you didn’t really respond to his question. Answering it would have *greatly* improved the paper, because as it is you have some summarization, followed by a quot e out of context, followed by a brief explanation of the quote and an attempt to tie it in to the real world, without even trying to explain how this quot e represents the book in general.

Making the connection to contemporary environmental issues is a fine approach, but it would have worked much better if you’d picked *one* environmental issue, rather than vaguely talking about everything.

Overall: You had a good passage and a good idea, but most of the actual content does nothing to advance that idea: you needed more focus, beginning with an analysis of the importance of the quote to the book as a whole.

Andre: Good response, which could have used an additional example or two.