Critique posts

I wasn't sure if we were supposed to post our critiques here or in the email.  i critiqued Sean Osterman's final project in class on Monday, and i liked the concept of his paper.  I suggested that he make his counter argument stronger and more concise, which in turn would force him to strengthen his argument.  I also thought that some of his quotes were long, and did not relate well to his thesis.  I suggested that he try to make his argument more specific, since it was a broad topic that could go off on a lot of tangents.  Overall I thought it was a good draft that needed a little work